I have an idea for a story set in the Fractal Cosmos universe.
It’s set on Venus in the late 2090’s and revolves around a young girl (around 12 years old) named Vena, who later becomes the very first Vian in the Solar.
Vena is a cloud-lady from the floating city of Santo Adrião. She comes from a poor family which could not afford to genetically modify her at birth, so, when she was little she had trouble keeping up with the other children in her school, who frequently mocked her for being worse than them at everything. Incapable of seeing their daughter suffering like that, Vena’s parents gathered all their money and went to a clinic where they improved her intellectual and physicall skills through cybernetic means.
After that, Vena became as good as her classmates at almost everything, and better than them at some other things, but she didn’t win any friends. Cybernetic augmentation, despite not illegal, was repudiated by the cloud-lord society, which meant that Vena, despite not being seen as loser anymore, started being seen as a freak. But at least she could now be proud of herself.
Anyway, this is just backstory. Our actual story begins when Santo Adrião is visited by members of the K’phlor collective, which came to negotiate a trade agreement with the cloud-lords. As part of a prank, a group of youngsters decides to vandalize the communications system of one of the hell-creepers, ending up separating him from the collective.
Vena finds the damaged hell-creeper on the street and learns that he has been left behind by the other members of the collective (who dind’t even realize that he’d been disconnected). She takes care of that hell-creeper and gives him the name of Lor. They quickly become friends and Vena tries to teach him to live among the humans, but all what Lor wants is to return to his brothers on K’phor village.
Unable to repair his communication system, Vena opts for acompanying her friend to the surface and return him to the collective herself (she uploads her mind to a fitting body, of course). They suceed and, as a reward, the hell-creepers teach Vena about the V system, which she later introduces to her civilization.
I know I still have to work out a few details but, do you think this can be a good story? I’m thinking of writing a novella and sending it to a sci-fi maganize to see if they publish it.